St Eubrie: 1854 Cherry Lane II (663 hits)
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Submitted by Foolproof (View user info) at 2006-08-07 09:42:54 EDT
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Mike collects up the spilled contents and quickly puts them back in the box. Roscoe lay on the couch, unconcerned with the events transpiring. Mike scooped up the box and rushed it to the garage. He had to do something with this. Heaven forbid his wife or kids see it. What would they think of their dad then?
He tried to think of what he could do. He couldn't keep it on the premises, that much he was sure of. Any member of the family could stumble upon it at any time. He had to get rid of it. He eyed a shovel leaning against the wall. Sure, he could bury it. He could say he was doing some yard work, even go buy a tree or bush to plant over it.
He couldn't do it during the day, however. What if the neighbors saw? One of them would surely tell Laura. The she would question him, and he couldn't have that.
Maybe he could burn it, but not here. Again, the neighbors. He thought he could take it deep into the forest to incinerate it. The only problem was getting it there. If he left his car along the road, a cop might come by. The he'd ask why he was out there. What if he started a forest fire?
Perhaps the dump was a good idea. The he could deny ever knowing bout the box. There was no address on the package, so it wasn't traceable to him.
Yes, that was the most logical solution. He would take it to the dump after night fell. Until then, the box would stay in the garage and he would go about his day.
Mike checks his watch. Almost noon, might as well get some lunch.
He goes to the kitchen and opens the fridge. After a bit of sorting though some leftovers, he decides on spaghetti from two days ago. He opened the plastic container and plopped it onto a plate. He put it in the microwave and set it for two minutes, when he hears another knock at the door. Roscoe doesn't move. Some guard dog he is.
Mike opens the front door to a letter on his doormat. Again, there is nobody in sight, and he thinks this to be some Jehovah's Witness propaganda. There is no writhing on the outside of the envelope, so he opens it.
Do not get rid of the package. Show your family or...
He stares at the letter. Who the hell is leaving these things? What the hell do they want from him?
There is no way he is keeping the box here. No way will his family ever know about it. Whoever is playing with him will pay.
He crumples the letter and throws it in the trash. He has to find out who is leaving these things on his porch. He grabs his video camera from his bedroom closet. After checking the tape and battery he heads out to the porch. When he finishes scanning the neighborhood, he places it in the bushes in front of his porch. He checks to see that the area is framed the way he wants it and turns it on. He stands at the door to make sure it isn't immediately noticeable and, when he is satisfied, goes back inside. He grabs his lunch and sits at the table, convinced that he will catch his tormenter.
User Reviews
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2007-02-19 13:59:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Better. Short.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2006-11-01 19:23:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Snalty (user info) at 2006-08-18 16:54:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This could have been longer, yes?
Submitted by URMY_bitch (user info) at 2006-08-16 10:50:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Faggot
Submitted by URMY_bitch (user info) at 2006-08-16 10:49:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by KindaNews (user info) at 2006-08-07 20:14:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
More of a 1.75, but I'll round up.
I would reveal the contents whenever it needs to be revealed. If it takes longer, it takes longer.
Or maybe it's a McGuffin, and never gets revealed.
Everything in its own time.
Some of your phrasing is still a little derivative (in my opinion) but I liked it. The idea is a good one in the context of a small town setting.
Submitted by awesome_face (user info) at 2006-08-07 15:16:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Thanks.
Submitted by Foolproof (user info) at 2006-08-07 15:00:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
foolproofx1.at.hotmail.cm
Submitted by awesome_face (user info) at 2006-08-07 13:41:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Foolproof do you have an email?
This part gave me a good idea. It's a small collaberation but i think it will be cool. It won't affect your story either.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2006-08-07 11:48:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I just got to know whats in there very soon.
Submitted by awesome_face (user info) at 2006-08-07 11:03:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Whats in the fruggin box!
Submitted by STIXS (user info) at 2006-08-07 10:43:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
But if you DON'T reveal, then you can make at least one extra post about it
...rack up hits and ratings
...just my 2¢
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2006-08-07 10:17:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I have to agree with everyone below me.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2006-08-07 10:06:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I have to agree with both those guys!!!
Submitted by Genko (user info) at 2006-08-07 09:56:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I have to agree with UOM here.
Submitted by UnderOathMeal (user info) at 2006-08-07 09:48:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Grrr ... disclosure of box contents WILL BE MADE in your next post, FP.
Either that or someone better get raped/killed/robbed/defamed.
Good shit.