A.D.D. Weren't You Someone Once? (811 hits)
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Submitted by JTC (View user info) at 2006-07-29 00:26:53 EDT
Hell if I know where I was. Never know whether I'm conscious or not. It comes and goes, on its own. It's a ghost, and I'm just the poor soul it possesses from time to time. Sometimes I find myself walking the shore of Antarctica, before it was iced over. They call it Atlantis, among other names. Sometimes, in the sky, I am a god, commanding fate itself. Silly mortals. In an older, nobler day, a lord amongst lords, or a valiant warrior. In a time and place far removed from here, engaged in a fierce battle for galactic supremacy against impossible odds. But those places are, of course, in my dreams, between my conscious episodes. I know this, because these things are impossible. But it is what is possible that bothers me.
Sitting on a park bench, or atop a tower. Having a picnic in a forest, with a girl, sometimes a family, but whose? Tending to a garden, my lawn. Working...working on something, what is it? I can never remember. I never know if its real or not. I can't tell, because I know it could be real. But is it real? Oh God, why couldn't I be normal?
I was in the middle of a field, sitting on a rock, thinking. Wondering, is this a conscious or unconscious experience? Was this a result of the writhing tendrils of fate, or the convulsions of my own subconscious psyche? I had almost decided, favoring the prior, when a man interrupted my thoughts. He sat next to me, and we were silent for quite a time as I continued to stare into nothing.
It was he who broke the silence. "I remember you," he said simply. My gaze drifted toward his face, and I realized that I remembered him as well.
"You were someone, once," was all I managed to say.
"I faced you at the battle for Andares Minor. I gave the command to annihilate the planet, rather than give it up to you."
"And I..." I began, "I fought with you and your titans, an epic struggle to keep the gods in control of fate. I faced you on the European continent, our two great armies surging against one another, the amount of blood spilt beyond reckoning, as we, two giants amongst mere men, clashed and did battle as avatars of our empires."
"And we meet here, of all places." He chuckled as he finished. "In this field, where we have met countless times before to do battle, we meet for the final time, in the flesh, to put to rest once and for all these endless dreams."
We stood together, and as he reached to touch my forehead, I did the same. When we made contact, a sensation like a shock shot through my brain as the subconscious link between us was severed. As the pain subsided, I felt a wave of relief. He said to me, "We were somebodies, once."
"Yes," I replied, "But now, we're nobodies."
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Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-07-29 22:01:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-07-29 21:01:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Awesome.
Submitted by phauna (user info) at 2006-07-29 18:28:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Valhallalicious.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-07-29 16:33:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this an awful lot. You are in the running for the prize 'serious writers forum' division.
This was good.
Submitted by Bundaberg (user info) at 2006-07-29 16:03:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by LSD420 (user info) at 2006-07-29 10:08:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-07-29 01:21:16 (#)
Ranking: 2
Solid.
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More like solid shit OH SCORE OH BURN OH FUCk I can't lie I liked this...
Submitted by moneyshotforyou (user info) at 2006-07-29 03:34:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I don't know why but I really liked this.
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Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2006-07-29 01:27:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-07-29 01:21:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Solid.
Submitted by Sinistral (user info) at 2006-07-29 00:37:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Have another one cause that wasnt fair.
Submitted by Sinistral (user info) at 2006-07-29 00:36:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Just kidding; good work.
Submitted by Sinistral (user info) at 2006-07-29 00:36:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Woulda been a +2 but it has 501 words. Sorry.
Submitted by Antioxident (user info) at 2006-07-29 00:32:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
gotta be the first