He wasn't trying to fly. That's just how it happened. (end) (978 hits)
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Submitted by The Downward Spiral of your Mind (View user info) at 2006-03-30 12:43:04 EST
Abruptly, amidst his blindness, he felt all the vegetation break free from him with a sickening rip, his charred flesh fell from his bones in heaps, and there was an earsplitting crash against his head.
He opened his eyes -the being was flying straight for the sun. He looked down; his bones, the only thing left of him, were dissolving to dust. And following the dust down as it streamed from his body with the great speed of the being's flight, he saw the house; the whole building was swathed in one giant flame, and engulfed in vines and flowers, still growing out towards the sun, flowers as big as the house itself now, with millions of petals spiraling from the blaze and settling all over the bleak land for miles around.
He remembered what he had read about fire, in the times before the sun was born; "Fire was the witness of antiquity; it alone could still remember the relics that had been crushed by the day's cloak. Fire remembered what it had fought against; its light in ancient days was a blemish on the blackness, and it shone to keep demons away from the hearts of the Ancestors." He could not help the thought that, somehow, the world beneath him was being cleansed. Despite the way his body was dissipating, he found solace in the thought. Perhaps he had done right... The being, eyes toward the sun, encircled him in its arms, and he felt himself disappearing.
The sun was close now. He had always read that it was in space, a place outside the sky; but they were still in the sky, inexplicably. The sun, like a pendulum with no strings, hung suspended over the dry earth that stretched out towards infinite horizons. The buzzing destiny he had heard in the being's voice surrounded him on all sides now. The sun was mere seconds away. He could see the faraway forest now, from here; the flames had reached it, and it was an inferno of light and glory. The tiny flower he had taken into his room had now covered the landscape, fires blooming from its stems. The being began to quake wildly, the closer they came to the sun the stronger the turbulence, until he felt that both he and the being were a single blur of movement, moving cometlike straight towards the burning sun.
He -it -they, shuddering wildly, plunged through the orb's fiery sphere. With a flash and a roar, he and the being, a single creature, were in an immediate stasis, frozen with the sun's gaze as their own. He beheld the world under his watch; a fiery jungle. There was no longer the fear of childhood, the fear of light. He knew then that the sun had never been his enemy; it had only hurt him so that he would bloom. Now he had broken his cocoon open, and his time had finally come. He was complete.
There was no time now for him; a single second and a million years were the same thing. So he did have an errant wish to return, the desire to know simplicity again. But he knew that time for what it was; beautiful, in its own way, and although gone forever, gone by necessity. With a single great blast of light, he snuffed out the inferior flames the flower had fed; no longer needed. Yet the flower's growth remained. The earth now lied green and vivid beneath him. The sky was clear, all clouds swept away by his flare. Never again would a child fear the light of the sun, of him. Peering down, he saw patches of fur scurrying about among the leaves; people, too, living and laughing beneath his light once more. His flesh had fed his own fires, and all was finally well.
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Submitted by Average_Dan (user info) at 2006-09-26 20:28:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You will feel my wrath you unjust evil-doer
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2006-06-18 15:44:02 EDT (#)
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higher than my average
Submitted by earth_collapse (user info) at 2006-06-18 15:43:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
"Yet the flower's growth remained."
This is what you get.
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2006-06-15 16:08:08 EDT (#)
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dude, if you can make it out here somehow, you'd certainly be welcome anytime if you needed a place to stay or anything like that. i mean, so long as you don't mind niggerhoods.
Submitted by chipolatte (user info) at 2006-06-15 00:31:10 EDT (#)
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how crazy is Dallas right now? it must be nuts. i wish i were there so bad for game 6 or 7. i'd pay pretty much anything
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2006-06-08 13:58:48 EDT (#)
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ha. thanks. i wrote a lot more than is on uber. some great, some shit, mostly average. i'm not sure where i got the idea. i usually start writing before i have anything clear in mind, just a mental image of a scene or two, and go from there.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2006-06-08 13:42:42 EDT (#)
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Where did you get this idea?
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2006-06-08 13:41:49 EDT (#)
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Write more stuff!
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2006-06-08 13:41:31 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-31 02:17:26 (#)
Ranking: 2
This was a great series all round. Well done.
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Submitted by loki (user info) at 2006-05-12 10:01:31 EDT (#)
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make that total dick
the good news is that the kid who hangs out with meth heads things you're kewl and wants to be just like you
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2006-05-10 19:56:12 EDT (#)
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Submitted by loki (user info) at 2006-05-10 19:30:42 (#)
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you're kind of a dick aren't you
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you insulted loki and now she's crying...bad boy
Submitted by loki (user info) at 2006-05-10 19:30:42 EDT (#)
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you're kind of a dick aren't you
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2006-05-04 13:00:06 EDT (#)
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nobody cares what you think, Salary
Submitted by TheSpook (user info) at 2006-05-04 07:31:10 EDT (#)
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Reads like you're trying to fucking hard.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-04-07 21:21:35 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2006-03-31 15:57:33 EST (#)
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thanks. i actually don't like the ending much at all, but eh. i'm just glad it's finished. i can always change it later on
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2006-03-31 09:40:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Yeah, ok, so it was good.
Up there with the best in fact. Well done.
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2006-03-31 06:27:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
An 11-parter I've completely missed that seems to have been well-received?
Damn, there goes my afternoon...
Have a +2 on the strength of others' ratings. I'll be back to flame you if they're all wildly wrong.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-31 02:43:40 EST (#)
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Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-31 02:17:26 EST (#)
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This was a great series all round. Well done.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2006-03-31 01:37:24 EST (#)
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Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-30 21:47:41 EST (#)
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Fuck yeah.
Submitted by firefly (user info) at 2006-03-30 16:58:11 EST (#)
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yay
Submitted by FunnyAsCancer (user info) at 2006-03-30 13:50:14 EST (#)
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Submitted by jme7551 (user info) at 2006-03-30 13:45:19 EST (#)
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Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-30 13:24:53 EST (#)
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Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-03-30 13:02:39 EST (#)
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