Hurricane Season (766 hits)
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Submitted by Kaos-King (antius777) (View user info) at 2009-09-09 06:45:32 EDT
For a Flash Fiction Contest elsewhere, that was between 100 & 550 words. Titles were provided.
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Ted flipped off the television, silencing the weather reporter. Tossing the remote onto the couch, he walked over to the living room window and stared out. It was quite a wonder that they still had electricity given the winds already bearing down. The storm was still a ways off coast, but once it arrived, such temporary luxuries would vanish.
He grieved for his neighbors and the others in the surrounding areas of the state. Ted knew this particular hurricane was going to be one of the worst in recorded history. The destruction was going to be massive, the loss of life incalculable. Many had already evacuated, but not all. In the end, such preparations wouldn't matter. This storm had appeared seemingly out of nowhere. Nowhere? A smile played at the corners of Ted's mouth. Maybe it had, indeed.
The sounds of Samantha fussing about over last minute details upstairs drifted down to him. It moved him to take another glance around the place he and his wife had lived in for the last ten years. It was a fine house, modestly decorated with a number of items from their short travels about the world. His work in international antiques had allowed them to visit many beautiful corners of the globe. Ted had always wished his acquisitions would take him to Australia, but he and Samantha had never made it. Regardless, the last decade had been filled with outstanding travel and not a little bit of adventure.
"Ted?" he heard Samantha call him from upstairs.
He found himself nodding in a sort of acquiescence. He would miss this place. Taking the staircase, he heard the winds brutal assault on the house increase, the rains beginning hard. The lights flickered as Ted reached the landing, but managed to stay on. Turning down the hallway, he strolled into the bedroom where he found Samantha cross-legged on the floor with one of the devices they had hidden in their closet.
"The data stream has all been sent," she said to him without looking up.
"Excellent, dear," he replied as he began unbuttoning his shirt.
Samantha sighed as she stood up and ran a hand through her short blonde hair. Leaving the mechanism on the floor, she peeled off her tank top as well as her shorts. Soon naked, she joined her husband on the bed and curled up next to him. Ted leaned over and kissed his wife, the intimacy igniting into laughter as the lights flickered again and finally went out.
"Well, that was great timing," he said.
Samantha giggled beside him as the hurricane shook the house harder. Ted lay on his back with his wife resting next to him, lovingly trailing a finger across his chest. They both stayed there in silence for some time and simply listened to the sounds of the storm batter the neighborhood.
Ted was lost in daydreams when the device his wife had left on the floor began to emit a rapid beeping sound. Samantha made a little noise of approval and hugged onto him tighter. The house began to quake even more violently, the room fill with a blinding blue light and Ted sighed.
"What?" asked Samantha.
"Shame about Australia."
"Yeah," she replied as they disappeared into the storm.
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User Reviews
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-09-12 12:05:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2009-09-12 04:43:03 BST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-09-11 03:44:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
pH?
so that means about 6 people read it.
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That's at least 1 more viewer than read it here in the land of milk and alters.
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whatever you say......
Submitted by darkwulffe (user info) at 2009-09-12 01:00:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
decent story.
Not like it matters, but his taking his own story offa PH and putting it here made for more content.
TOU SUCK FOR THAT KK!
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2009-09-11 23:43:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-09-11 03:44:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
pH?
so that means about 6 people read it.
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That's at least 1 more viewer than read it here in the land of milk and alters.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-09-11 06:39:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Way to miss the point.
I get that you're 'KaosKing' and I get that you're 'antius777'.
What I don't get is why you feel the need to post the same shitty stories on two different websites and refer to PH as 'elsewhere'.
It's just fucking retarded man. And pretty pathetic too.
You'll probably respond with something about getting different audience reaction. Fair play.
But it's still retarded and pathetic.
Aren't you too busy picking up dole cheques to post on two sites anyway?
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-09-11 03:44:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2009-09-11 02:41:42 BST (#)
Ranking: 0
Right Hurty...
As if it's not common knowledge that I post on pH all the time.
You DO see that my submission name for my last, oh... 500 posts has been Kaos-King (antius777)???
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pH?
so that means about 6 people read it.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2009-09-10 22:48:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
save the excuses, plagiarist
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2009-09-10 21:41:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Right Hurty...
As if it's not common knowledge that I post on pH all the time.
You DO see that my submission name for my last, oh... 500 posts has been Kaos-King (antius777)???
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-09-10 12:03:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
You know what? I've just had a look at some of your other recent posts and they've all been plagiarised as well.
What gives man, why are you stealing things from another website and posting them here as your own?!
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2009-09-10 11:55:19 EDT (#)
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Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-09-10 11:47:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
PLAGIARISED!! ZOMG!!!
http://pulsehead.com/612
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-09-10 11:47:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
PLAGIARISED!! ZOMG!!!
http://pulsehead.com/612
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2009-09-09 21:41:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by willartstorg (user info) at 2009-09-09 20:30:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by YourNameHere (user info) at 2009-09-09 17:18:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2009-09-09 16:02:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I like when he posts a "fit" much better than when he posts this ____________.
Shlongy: poet laureate of ubersite.
*****
Shlongy: Dipshit laureate of ubersite.
Submitted by willartstorg (user info) at 2009-09-09 20:28:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2009-09-09 12:58:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
i think his reactions are funny.
i think when nothing happens here for weeks on end, his little outbursts are all that keep people here
i think he knows that, yet can't help himself because he craves attention
other than how he is a means to my end i dont think about him at all
it's a white male thing, you wouldnt understand
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Doodles' "means to an end" is simply being a troll who strikes from anonymity. He hasn't the sack to say who he is and speak to Kaos or ANYONE ELSE in person. Little chicken shit.
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2009-09-09 17:58:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by YourNameHere (user info) at 2009-09-09 17:18:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2009-09-09 16:02:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I like when he posts a "fit" much better than when he posts this ____________.
Shlongy: poet laureate of ubersite.
Submitted by YourNameHere (user info) at 2009-09-09 16:28:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Mr.Bun (user info) at 2009-09-09 16:15:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This was a great story!
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2009-09-09 16:02:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I like when he posts a "fit" much better than when he posts this ____________.
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2009-09-09 15:34:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Yes, slightly generic, but not bad.
The +2 is because I'm not a fan of schoolyard bullying.
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2009-09-09 14:12:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2009-09-09 12:58:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
it's a white male
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you don't have to be white or a male to laugh at kaos king's fits.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2009-09-09 12:58:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
i think his reactions are funny.
i think when nothing happens here for weeks on end, his little outbursts are all that keep people here
i think he knows that, yet can't help himself because he craves attention
other than how he is a means to my end i dont think about him at all
it's a white male thing, you wouldnt understand
Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2009-09-09 12:53:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Get what?
You think he's a shit writer. Got it.
You think he's a fat fuck. Got it.
You think he's a leech on society. Got it.
You think he's a waste of blood and skin. Got it.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2009-09-09 12:46:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
you don't get it, do you, fg?
Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2009-09-09 12:36:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Shit almighty, Doodles
He's obviously not going to stop posting, lose weight, write better, get off government assistance, or any of the dozen other things you think he should do just because you follow him around trolling.
So the only thing you're doing is illustrating how obsessed you are about his life.
Seriously, if he's that offensive to you, ignore him.
Submitted by TechnoRatty (user info) at 2009-09-09 12:23:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I have a short attention span....
Now, where the fuck did I leave my chainsaw?
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2009-09-09 12:21:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Okay, so i was going to read it an got to the part where Ted flipped off the television, silencing the weather reporter.
so ted stuck his middle finger up, and the weather reporter was so aghast at how his non-confrontational report offended his viewers?
cuz that doesn't make any sense.
or maybe you were trying to say he turned off the tv, but wanted to be discriptive, so you used flipped. this is even le3ss likely than the first scenario, as you, of all people, should know that there is no flipping, or toggling, of a t.v., or for that matter, a remote. i say you should know this as all you would appear to do is write shit tories, eat shit food, drink shit beer and watch shit programming on syndicated channels.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2009-09-09 12:12:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
http://www.ubersite.com/m/123231#2930837
didn't read this
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2009-09-09 12:01:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
now i want to go to the French Quarter
Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2009-09-09 08:55:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
meh. I've seen you do better.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-09-09 08:55:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
generic
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2009-09-09 08:54:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
awesome as always but you still havent answered my question
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2009-09-09 08:47:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
No matter what you think - I do like how you write. And this was kinda 'been there'
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2009-09-09 07:48:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-09-09 07:07:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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