Ubertines 08: Hourglass (1180 hits)
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Submitted by Orgasmatron (View user info) at 2008-02-14 15:16:15 EST
There below the cigarettes and silhouetttes
Of hours and a mess of tangled, naked limbs
Reclining, massed in twist, curl-rip and damp
Bodyprint depressions remain all the things
Best left unspoken and forgotten.
Names and other stupid histories
Concrete objections and fat, empty words
From the papers and the frames
Are best kept silent by midnight;
There is no time but heart time,
The swelling tick and tidal tock,
There is no time but blood time,
A rush of shared breath blown one
To another, a red love god split
Million from crown to arch and back
Again to resemble and divide,
These are the hours of our fathers
And mothers
And the rest.
Here at the approximate end of yours
And mine we need names nor faces,
We have what we require;
Breathe into me
Breathe out
Scatter us into heaven
And the spill of your hair,
There is no time but blood time
No present but fingertips, and fingertips,
And the silent fire held safe between,
No second hand circling dull and aimless
Speaking itself as sand against the glass;
Exhausted, paired, locked living in
Bends and breaks and earthquakes the
The song is silent
Unbreakable
It is now
It is we
It is.
User Reviews
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-02-16 10:42:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2008-02-16 08:55:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I know you're all really thinking of me when you're saying each other's names.
I'm too sexy for this place.
So sexy it hurts.
Submitted by netimportant (user info) at 2008-02-16 02:51:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Just kidding, I don't actually want to bang anyone from the Internet
again
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2008-02-16 02:23:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
It's ok, Sac.. we talked about you the whole time.
Well, grunted your name a lot, anyway.
Well, I know we plastered the walls with pictures of you and then fucked like rabid wolves while we played a tape of your voice through thirteen ceiling speakers.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-02-15 22:55:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I shouldn't smoke and comp rate
sry
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-02-15 22:54:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
ooops.
i meant to say:
Hell yeah, I would!
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-02-15 22:53:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
When they're Circe & O? Hell yeah, I do!
:p
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-15 22:27:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
ooops.
i meant to say:
OMGWTF!
o_0
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-15 22:26:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
you'd rather your mommy or daddy were with...you?
that's nasty.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-02-15 22:03:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Mommy..and Daddy..together?
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2008-02-15 21:43:19 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ever since we had an affair, that hot bitter twisted messy little chapter of unspeakable lust and depravity, I can't help but feel like every one of your poems is about me.
I mean, I don't mind - "muse" is on my resume somewhere, after all - but for the love of god, don't make it so obvious. It embarrasses us both... but mostly you.
Submitted by Lib (user info) at 2008-02-15 17:03:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-15 15:57:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
OMGWTF
:/
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2008-02-15 15:44:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
bearfucking narc below
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-15 15:44:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
LOL
:)
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2008-02-15 15:40:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Finessing below.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-02-15 15:22:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm sorry, I should have said "exchange." I LOLZED at that exchange in a quiet cubefarm. I don't care.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2008-02-15 15:19:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Don't forget the bbq or the rofl.
Nothing says "internet elite" like suggesting a laughing helicopter cookout.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-15 15:16:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
OMGWTFLOL
:(
i should do the remainder of my uber career with just OMGs WTFs LOLs, combinations of the three, and emoticons
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2008-02-15 15:14:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
IT WAS TOTALLY IN RESPONSE TO MY COMMENT, PIMPLE!
HOW FOOLISH OF YOU TO ASSUME THAT YOU ARE eSPECIAL. O DEVASTATA! O STINKY COLOGNE OF DESPERATION!
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-15 15:07:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
and which comment would that be?
(OMGWTFLOL I HOPE YOU SAY MINE SO I FEEL E-COOL AND VALIDATED!)
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-02-15 14:59:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I laughed so hard at that comment I thought I might get fired.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-15 14:54:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
now where are the fag hags?
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-15 14:54:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
you had me at 'pirate'
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2008-02-15 14:42:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Oh pirate, will you CJ me...all over again?
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-15 14:35:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
haha
you'll always hold a special place in my heart, poet.
in my pants too.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2008-02-15 14:28:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
It's Fist & Twist, and I halped!
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-15 13:58:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
hahaha
lisa used to call noonie and lishy your fag-hags. now she saw an internet pic of you and is in an e-swoon.
you should totally meet up with her!
maybe start small, a walk along the river or in some local park. something that really gives you a chance at getting to know each other. you could recite poetry about bodily fluids while she bitched about one of the many things that bothers her.
after that you would take your evening to some cafe where they had obnoxious world music playing...
a place where the lights aren't too low. bars and restaurants...bah, i say. low lighting is for people with something to hide. and you want to know each other inside and out. on a near spiritual level. talk and let the hot tea warm your bodies from the cold air outside while the conversation warms your hearts and minds from the freezing assault of the uncaring mass of humanity.
you'd go back to her place for a drink.
then you'd fist her.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2008-02-15 13:05:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by netimportant (user info) at 2008-02-14 22:42:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Is this about the mind-blowing, electric sex we're going to have?
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I can only think of A Christmas Story when I see "electric sex."
Now I want a leg lamp in the worst way.
I can write about fuse-blowing electric sex if you want.
It'd give me a chance to use "vrrrrrrrr" as a verb.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-02-14 23:32:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I know it's been quite a while since you've posted a Serious Poem, and I've missed them, but I didn't realize how much until you wrote one again.
"And the silent fire held safe between.." So few words can convey so much.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2008-02-14 23:15:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ahh, poetry that does not suck.
Submitted by netimportant (user info) at 2008-02-14 22:42:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Is this about the mind-blowing, electric sex we're going to have?
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2008-02-14 21:24:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
THESE ARE THE DAYS OF MY LIFE.
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-02-14 21:00:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-02-14 20:19:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2008-02-14 20:05:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2008-02-14 12:51:28 PST (#)
Ranking: 2
i have no idea what the fuck i just read... but i liked it. some outstanding lines in there.
i'm also drunk, so take that compiment for what it means. i mean, i've fucked ugly fat women much more sober than this, so who knows.
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Ha, go you.
Submitted by TheGoat (user info) at 2008-02-14 19:57:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-02-14 22:51:37 GMT (#)
Ranking: 2
Agreed. For some reason (probably 'cause I'm stoopid), the whole hourglass thing went completely past me the first 2 or 3 times.
Submitted by Ltap (user info) at 2008-02-14 18:55:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
It's pretty good, just barely a +2.
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:51:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Agreed. For some reason (probably 'cause I'm stoopid), the whole hourglass thing went completely past me the first 2 or 3 times.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:51:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
in fact, I'll go as far as to say this is one of the sexiest poems I've read.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:49:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
keep in mind that I've had a cold for the past few weeks, so it's a touch lower and more gravely than typical.
I'll say that this ISN'T the easiest poem to read and appreciate.. it has a subtler beauty that needs examination and thought... and re-reading. But once you've slowed down enough to really dive in, there are some gorgeous bits.
I'm a girl, so sappy really DOES get to me:
"There is no time but heart time,
The swelling tick and tidal tock" sigh...you can feel the breathing and feel the space of the moment.
My favorite line is the "No present but fingertips, and fingertips,
And the silent fire held safe between" It REALLY does take me to a good place...one I'd happily live in.
Submitted by MyTeeOne (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:46:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
It seems like you kind of called this one in. Like maybe you were inspired to write it two weeks ago, but just got around to doing it.
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:44:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Hopefully, you'll type your response in a really sexy voice.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:43:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
ok, good then :-)
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:43:29 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Well, scratch that. I still want to hear what YOU think its about.
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:42:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
On the O-man's. But don't bother. I finally got it on, like, the 8th read. As I said, I'm a little blunt today.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:34:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
thought on MY poem? or thoughts on Orgasmatron's?
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:26:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ding! OK. I got it. +2 well deserved.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:12:37 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
this kinda sucked.
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-02-14 17:04:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2008-02-14 16:29:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
O-man, you used too many multi-syllable words. The autards are having trouble following.
you need to re-write this for them. I'll start it for you
"Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
please use some words
that Simon already knew"
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Yeah - I'm a little blunt today. But I'd like to hear your thoughts on this little Ms. Big Brain.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2008-02-14 16:30:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Enjoy your laughs people. I still have a trick up my sleeve.... muuuuwhaahahahaaha.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2008-02-14 16:29:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
O-man, you used too many multi-syllable words. The autards are having trouble following.
you need to re-write this for them. I'll start it for you
"Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
please use some words
that Simon already knew"
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2008-02-14 16:04:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Shit, meant a +1.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2008-02-14 16:04:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
And what exactly did this have to do with the holiday?
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:51:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i have no idea what the fuck i just read... but i liked it. some outstanding lines in there.
i'm also drunk, so take that compiment for what it means. i mean, i've fucked ugly fat women much more sober than this, so who knows.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:49:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Not your best.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:49:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
But a tad more, nonetheless. +0.5 ye shall receive from me.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:48:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I can see you tried about as much as I did with this round.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:38:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Bump for your usual effortless but ultimately empty imagery.
Why not have a little meat with those potatoes?
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:37:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
There is no time but heart time?
Oh, man.
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:30:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
NOT!
HAHAHAHAHAHAHHA
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:30:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
clever
touchet
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:27:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
a BoTox tribute post?
what do i care about BoTox?
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:25:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:19:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i also think you put yourself against me on purpose knowing i would forfeit.
well HAHA, jokes on you. i have the greatest post in the world coming up this evening. you will weep at its beauty.
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it better be a BoSox tribute post you bearfucking narc
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:25:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This ain't no pome. Real pomes rime.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:22:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
this isn't my silhouette!!
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:21:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
It is - what? I don't get it. I'm giving you a +2 on the assumption (probability) that this is WAY over my head. I reserve the right to lower my rating.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:19:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i also think you put yourself against me on purpose knowing i would forfeit.
well HAHA, jokes on you. i have the greatest post in the world coming up this evening. you will weep at its beauty.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-14 15:18:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
this is not the title i supplied you with.