SUPA Finals: I Heard the Owl Call My Name (651 hits)
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Submitted by ahumblefool (View user info) at 2007-05-08 19:26:15 EDT
JoeyG, you can imagine the shock this afternoon when I came online and saw your poem about a bird. So is mine. My son and I just finished reading "I Heard the Owl call my Name," Saturday, and I sat down on Sunday and wrote this poem, based on my feelings from the book.
JoeyG, your poem is a fine piece of work. O, thanks for the opportunity and thanks to everyone who competed. I am not much of a poetry reader, but I really enjoyed the work that was submitted for the competition.
So without further ado, I Heard the Owl Call My Name.
Each night the cry of the owl grows near
Its mournful sound a call home I hear
And I alone inside this room
As once before inside the womb
The owl hears each trembling breath I take
My ending time I no longer shake
He sits upon my window sill
His destiny he must fulfill
Now knowing the peaceful calm inside
The Great Horned Owl will soon be my guide
To take my soul away from here
The other side I soon will peer
He watches with an understanding
His soulful eyes are yet commanding
My time has come and I must leave
The tapestry of life I weave
My soul he cleaves with talons red
My body alone within this bed
And I now know of the calming peace
As my last breath my body release
And as the bird it takes to flight
I commit my soul into the night
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Submitted by Mr_T (user info) at 2007-05-09 20:30:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
pity the..... whatever, obvious alter rating
Submitted by Marina (user info) at 2007-05-09 20:29:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by FlakMonkey (user info) at 2007-05-09 20:28:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-05-09 20:28:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Mr_Burns (user info) at 2007-05-09 17:41:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I feel I have to make amends for the jerk below.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-05-09 20:28:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Mr_Burns (user info) at 2007-05-09 17:41:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I feel I have to make amends for the jerk below.
Submitted by HotWillie (user info) at 2007-05-09 19:39:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by The_taste_of_Monkeys (user info) at 2007-05-09 19:30:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOT!
Submitted by The_taste_of_Monkeys (user info) at 2007-05-09 19:30:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOT!
Submitted by blueboy (user info) at 2007-05-09 19:14:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is my vote
Submitted by Mr_Burns (user info) at 2007-05-09 17:41:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I feel I have to make amends for the jerk below.
Submitted by ColchesterDr (user info) at 2007-05-09 17:33:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-05-09 17:32:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You've consistently done a lot with a little throughout this little to-do, and as someone who always finds himself saying a whole lot more than is necessary I salute you for that.
I can't tell if you're going for a 9/9 8/8 sequence, as some of the pairs contain both syllable counts, but I could recommend tightening up some of the verbage so that the lines run a bit smoother. For instance: "And I now know of the calming peace/As my last breath my body release" could become something like "I know now of the calming peace/As my lips breathe my last release."
Thanks for being a rock during this event. I hope you've enjoyed it.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-05-09 13:46:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
<3
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-05-09 13:44:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by snag (user info) at 2007-05-09 12:43:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-05-08 21:11:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by snag (user info) at 2007-05-08 20:57:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I appreciate the gravity of this +0, but it's an honest +0. I was not at all moved by this.
*****
AHF,you deserve better than this asshole's rating. He came back from the dead after almost three years, and he should have stayed dead....
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STFU, Bubba. I rated this according to it's value to me. I did the same for JoeyG's offering.
Submitted by ahumblefool (user info) at 2007-05-09 11:20:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2007-05-09 10:31:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Beautiful animal.
How have you been?
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I have been doing well. Family are all doing fine, finally getting some much needed sunshine and some much needed R&R. My son wants to climb Mt. Rainier next summer so I have been working with him to get prepared and trained, so I am really looking forward to that experince.
I hear you are getting married? Congratulations! Honestly, it is the best experince in the whole world if it is truly someone you can see spending the rest of your life with. It has its ups and downs, but the ups so outweigh the downs. Let me know the date, would like to send you at least some best wishes.
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2007-05-09 10:31:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Beautiful animal.
How have you been?
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-05-09 09:43:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
So a 1.5 is my final rating. Best of luck!
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-05-09 09:43:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Very nice, but your opponent's is slightly better.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-05-09 09:10:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-05-09 06:17:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-05-09 03:28:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Carry On Camping King!!
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-05-09 03:12:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-05-09 03:38:41 BST (#)
Ranking: 2
This post deserves a hell of a lot better rating.
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My thoughts exactly.
And I love the fact that you based it on something you had read with your son.
Good work. You've been a lot more consistent than me in this comp, and you deserve this much more than I do.
Submitted by Bohme (user info) at 2007-05-09 02:08:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Should have taken the direct route, what a waste.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-05-09 00:17:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
.5
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-05-09 00:17:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I wanted to like this more than I did, if only because you seem like such a good guy.
I was even tempted to rate this higher than I think it deserves, but in all honesty this was not as good as your opponent's.
(Although his is overrated, in my opinion)
Somehow I think you will be fine with that, as you seem to appreciate the spirit of the competition.
Cheers.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-05-08 23:16:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I prefer Joey's, sorry mate.
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-05-08 22:38:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This post deserves a hell of a lot better rating.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-05-08 21:41:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
This was quite good as well!
... but not as good as yer competition - normally I'd just +2 it, but in the spirit of the contest +1 is what you get.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-05-08 21:11:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by snag (user info) at 2007-05-08 20:57:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I appreciate the gravity of this +0, but it's an honest +0. I was not at all moved by this.
*****
AHF,you deserve better than this asshole's rating. He came back from the dead after almost three years, and he should have stayed dead....
Submitted by snag (user info) at 2007-05-08 20:57:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I appreciate the gravity of this +0, but it's an honest +0. I was not at all moved by this.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-05-08 19:31:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-05-08 19:31:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The rhythm was a little off, but still pretty good.
+1.5
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-05-08 19:28:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment