SUPA R2: Amongst the Long Shadows (785 hits)
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Submitted by coley (View user info) at 2007-04-17 19:07:48 EDT
Amongst the long shadows
their forms barely seen
they walk through the alleys
'gainst brick walls they lean
with a tap of their canes
and a tip of their hats
they scare away more
than just the stray cats
hair slicked back perfect
kerchief at breast
shoes overshined
one thumb hitched in vest
they slink and they skulk
their grins fearful and sly
those who know best
never do meet their eye
for they're trouble, those men
with the long coats of black
as if ears to the ground
they're on top of the facts
they'll know if you cross 'em
wherever you are
they've got the informants
they've got the slick cars
no hesitation to harm you
no warning of word
and off you'll be dragged
and your cries, never heard.
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Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-05-10 03:32:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wearing a tie.
Wearing a shirt.
Wearing Shoes.
Wearing suit trosuers.
I should so get laid today.
*wink wink*
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-22 20:16:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Aw Lish, I couldn't have gone anyway. We'll party it up somewhere, eventually; and I'm sure the soundtrack will rule.
And yeah, I let it ring probably three or four times, but I was afraid i'd wake you.
O-Man: You know this.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-04-21 20:13:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-20 03:05:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Lish: I tried calling you tonight after my Spanish class but realized the time difference and was afraid I'd wake you.
OMG I WILL TRY AGAIN!
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Did it ring a few times before you hung up? OMG I WAS LIEK TOTALLY AWAKE!!1 I miss you. Call me any time you want.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-04-21 17:45:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Ideally that's not all you'd have been doing during that performance.
You two really should find a way to put the O in Whoregon, you know.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-04-21 17:14:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-19 10:39:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I haven't heard Skankhill Butchers OR seen V for Vendetta...
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-04-18 23:17:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Have you heard the song "Shankhill Butchers?" You should give it a listen.
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I was positive I commented on this before.
Had the stars aligned in our favor, Coley and I would have been hearing "Shankill Butchers" live, TOGETHAR, at the upcoming Decemberists show when I crashed her house in whoregon.
Stupid stars hate me.
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-19 16:20:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
St_Jimmy: Thanks for the heads-up. I much prefer books over movie versions of stories for the most part, anyhow.
Submitted by St_Jimmy (user info) at 2007-04-19 13:38:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-19 10:39:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I haven't heard Skankhill Butchers OR seen V for Vendetta...
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No, no, no, no! Don't see the movie, read the graphic novel. The novel's MUCH better.
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-19 10:39:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I haven't heard Skankhill Butchers OR seen V for Vendetta...
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-04-18 23:17:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Have you heard the song "Shankhill Butchers?" You should give it a listen.
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2007-04-18 22:41:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
This made me think of the movie Ghost.
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-18 18:37:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Did I miss the part with the zombies.
I really want someone to post about zombies.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-04-18 16:23:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I <3 NICOLE
Submitted by St_Jimmy (user info) at 2007-04-18 15:38:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I enjoyed this. It made me think of the Fingermen in V for Vendetta.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-04-18 10:54:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Very good grace CT, I have no idea what the hoo hah was about but you have proved to be a real gentlemen.
Way to get sum lovin from Coley ;)
schwwwing
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-18 10:11:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Coley - go ahead and take the advance to round 3. Rather than create any more drama than I already have, I'm deciding to take the gentleman's route here and gracefully bow out of round 2.
P.S. I liked this poem of yours.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2007-04-18 10:02:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Ok, I'm giving you two the same rating, since I thought CT's entry was a repost, and apparently it's not.
Someone else can figure out who goes to R3.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2007-04-18 09:49:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I think you should advance, so I'm bumping my rating.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-04-18 08:16:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-04-18 05:25:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Saccy hit the nail on the head.
Low men indeed.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-04-18 02:56:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
What no tortellini........
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-04-18 02:21:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-17 23:38:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-17 20:34:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Coley darling, I have made my average score for your competition this round a 0.
Now I give you this -2 in order that my average rating for this entry is the same.
'Worth reading' is my honest rating, which I hope you accept as such.
I decided I am certainly not the ethics arbiter of this contest.
Though I think CaptainThorns clearly violated the rules and should be DQ'd, that decision is better left to the contestants or the person running the contest.
I actually think his poem is better that yours.
But since it was written long ago, that means, in its creation, there was neither time constraint nor expended effort.
Clearly you should advance.
I'm terribly sorry for any pain my reversal has caused you.
My thoughts are with you in the difficult hours until a final decision is rendered.
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You actually made me laugh out loud.
Damn you, I refuse to LOL again!
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2007-04-17 21:11:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-17 20:49:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
One more review makes it even all the way around.
I think I'm finished.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-17 20:34:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Coley darling, I have made my average score for your competition this round a 0.
Now I give you this -2 in order that my average rating for this entry is the same.
'Worth reading' is my honest rating, which I hope you accept as such.
I decided I am certainly not the ethics arbiter of this contest.
Though I think CaptainThorns clearly violated the rules and should be DQ'd, that decision is better left to the contestants or the person running the contest.
I actually think his poem is better that yours.
But since it was written long ago, that means, in its creation, there was neither time constraint nor expended effort.
Clearly you should advance.
I'm terribly sorry for any pain my reversal has caused you.
My thoughts are with you in the difficult hours until a final decision is rendered.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-04-17 20:05:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Tis aight.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:52:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
they'll know if you cross 'em
wherever you are
they've got the informants
they've got the slick cars
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SHIT YEAH SICK CARSSSS
DO THE DRIFT BITTTCHESS SCREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEECH *death*
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:38:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I love SK. I never finished Dark Tower; I only read the first two or three (at the time they were the only ones out; so you can see how long it's been) and I haven't wanted to read the rest until I had a chance to go back over them all from the beginning.
Hearts in Atlantis..it's been a long time for that one, too...I liked it alright, and I *do* remember that phrase.
Hmph!
Lish: Perhaps I was influenced by that classyass party I went to last weekend...mmm..men in suits.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:36:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
OK, so I really enjoy Stephen King, but I never read The Dark Tower series. I know, I know. I'm saving it for now. But I DID read Hearts in Atlantis, and so I can say that while I read this I kept thinking "Low men in yellow coats.."
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:33:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
ohh JonnyX knows the car of my dreaaaams!
Steak: it's not depressing; it's CLASSY and stuff.
I can't not rhyme.
Take away the rhyme option, and I can't even *pretend* to write poetry...
Submitted by NoMeD (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:31:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Whats it worth? Nothing, but the sentimental value is through the roof.
Submitted by ilikesteak (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:28:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
1. poetry does not hav to rhyme
2. poetry does not have to be depressing.
That is all.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:26:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
they'll know if you cross 'em
wherever you are
they've got the informants
they've got the slick cars
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LIKE A Z-28 BABY, OH YEAHHHHHHHHHH
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:25:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Ha! Okay then.
Hope you feel better soon.
PS if you need a caregiver and pay well I'll fetch you soup and stuff.
Submitted by darko (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:23:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I'm too sick to actually read things
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:15:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I should have named it "a farewell to tortellini"
why aren't you gonna read it, j?
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:14:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Needs more pasta.
Submitted by darko (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:13:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
not gonna read it
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-04-17 19:08:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
IT AINT PASTA!